Trailer Intro/Outro feedback

I performed a peer feedback on the rough video i created and posted previously.
Throughout the feedback, several things where mentioned and need to be redone to be more effective.

1. The blue behind the company logo needs to be brighter, to ensure the logo stands out better.
2. "Presents" needs to be a different shade of blue, and moved further away from the logo, as that clash with each other.
3. It was suggested that the video should be the intro.If made the intro, the beginning of the trailers actual video fades in, with the title overlaying the video, and fading out to show the video in full.

This feedback shall all be taken into consideration when producing the actual trailer. I have to decide if the video should be placed at the start, or at the end. To do this, i might produce 2 trailers, both with the video at different points of the video, and gather further feedback during production.

Trailer Outro rough draft.

For the final scene, I will then reveal the name of the film, and the company name. this is a rough draft of what the outro will look like with the current logo's. The outro will change throughout the development.

(Quality of the video was reduced for a faster upload.)

company Title Continued

Seeing as the title would be placed onto a black background when added to te trailer, i dedcided to develop the logo so that it would appear on the background efficiently.

Company title

Here is a quick mockup of the company title logo that shal be used in the trailer.

Title Mock-ups

As the the title of the film will be "The Bronzemen" I decided to play around with the metallic bronze effect for the main title.

Film Title Idea

Here is the short-list of ideas for the title of the film.

The Male's Dream.
The Legacy.
New tradition.
The slackers.
The Bronzemen.


I have asked my target market of the film which of these films they proffered, these are the results.

The Male's Dream. - 5

The Legacy. - 3

New tradition. - 2

The slackers. - 7

The Bronzemen. - 8

The target market has selected that the Bronzemen is the most interesting of title names. I therefore have decided to use this as the title name, as it is the highest rated of the target market, and it will allow for more room when designing the title.

This is the initial storyboard/time line.
As the animatic doesn't portray much of what is actually going to be implemented, here is a run-down of each slide.

1. Establishing long shot of a normal street, with people live dull, boring, everyday lives.
2. Cut to close up of the main character, who is also living a boring, routine life. The expression on his face will show how bored the character is. 
3. Multiple scenes following the main character. all clips are boxed together with narrative of him talking to group of main cast, expressing dismay. the boxed in is supposed to represent his life being closed in.
4. Cut to main character, with group, sat round the table. narrative is synced in to show the main character actually talking.
5. Dialogue switches to planning the event. character slams down plans of the building etc, listing points etc.
6. Joke will be in place here. Slow motion shots of running down either motorcycle or vehicle, emphasising the power of the machine. Narrative talks about a getaway vehicle.
7. Shot cuts to L plate on the vehicle.
8. Cuts to multiple sequences of action, in preparation of the event.
9. After multiple action sequences, title of the film comes in, similar to a blast effect. Music and image fade out to black.

all of these decisions are set to change dependent of the length of the trailer, and whether or not the time length needs to increase or decrease.